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HELP me with this essay? Topic: An essay on doing homework
June 20, 2019 / By Kori
Question: ok. im doing an essay on reasons why you shouldnt have homework... i dont know how to start my essay. i have all my three facts and all... i just dont know how to make the beginng sound interesting and start it off! thanks for you help!
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Ingram Ingram | 3 days ago
"The topic sentence cannot be a fact as facts cannot be debated. It should be a statement of position. That position must be clear and direct. This statement directs the readers to follow along with your logic towards the specific stated conclusion that you want them to support. Do not make it personal so do not use personal pronouns. Make it definitive. Then, in the same introductory paragraph, state the three best reasons that you have to support your position as the remainder of the opening paragraph. These reasons become the topics of each of the three supporting paragraphs. Again, be sure they are able to be supported with additional separate facts. In the body of the essay, the writer uses specific evidence, examples, and statistics and not broad generalizations or personal opinions to persuade the reader that the stated position is a valid one. Each topic sentence for the support paragraphs have been introduced in the beginning paragraph. Each additional sentence must closely relate to the topic and the sentence that came before it. This way, the logic of the argument is easy to follow. Be sure to use adequate transitions between paragraphs as they make it easy for the reader to follow the logic of the presentation. As one closes the essay, it is most important to to clearly redefine the topic and restate the most compelling evidence cited in original form. Remember, this is the last chance to remind the reader and convince him/her to accept the writer's position. Do not introduce new material in the conclusion." There are also a lot of useful things on that website. Good luck on your essay! :D
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Ingram Originally Answered: U.S History Essay. The Cold War was mainly the U.S.’fault. I need some thesis ideas, to write my five paragraph essay?
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Ingram Originally Answered: U.S History Essay. The Cold War was mainly the U.S.’fault. I need some thesis ideas, to write my five paragraph essay?
the publicly stated intention of the USSR was to take over and convert the world to communism. this philosophy changed from an idyll musing to accomplished fact as the result of WW2 and Stalin was able to take over the governments of Poland, part of Germany, Estonia, Albania, Slovakia, Hungary, and several other states. This generated a great, and probably justifiable fear in the western states who had also been weakened by the war. The response from America was the formation of NATO to counter USSR and SEATO to counter China militarily, and to institute the diplomatic policy of "containment". The upshot of containment was to use all means short of warfare to halt the communist expansion, these efforts were what became dubbed "the cold war" by the press. Containment allowed the USSR and China to keep its vassal states with approval from the west in return for not attempting expansion elsewhere. It was at best an uneasy truce, exemplified by Khrushchev promising to bury the children of America. Without America, there would not have been a cold war so blame us, but the alternative would have certainly been WW3. This ended when the USSR collapsed, primarily from it inability to feed its people from failed harvests in the Ukraine.
Ingram Originally Answered: U.S History Essay. The Cold War was mainly the U.S.’fault. I need some thesis ideas, to write my five paragraph essay?
The only way you could write an essay like this is by justifying the paranoid point of view of the Soviets. I don't envy your job.

Ewain Ewain
You need a hook. You need a sentence that will catch the readers eye first think they read the essay. The Menacing sound of the pencils screetching on the desk and the load moans reminded me of how dreadful and useless homework is for our school thats why I believe that our school should not have homework. We should have to (List 1st reason here). In addition it doesnt... (List 2nd reason here). Also you have to consider.. (List 3rd reason here). And the conclusion is as you should already know reprhasing the introduction and putting in it a summary tense 'and thats why I believe are school has no need for homework.' What I wrote for the intro is fine. TRUST ME DO NOT go to in deph in the introduction paragraph just use the examples I gave. All the details and indeph persuation needs to be in the body (aka the middle).
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Ewain Originally Answered: Is this essay good? Plz give me some comments,some improvements and the IELTS band score for this essay?
> SHOULD FOOD MANUFACTURERS BE FORCE Wrong verb form: it should be 'forced'. > Nowadays, junk food is gradually becoming a specific part of daily life I think it was always 'specific'. A more to the point word like 'important', 'basic' or 'constant' is better for the essay purpose. > Eating much of these foods causes obesity and premature death; especially foods with high fat Two uses of 'foods' very close to each other. I suggest replacing one of them by a pronoun. > In this essay, I intend to show that food manufacturers need to be forced to ... IMO, a good essay should speak for itself, so the 28 words you use to close the paragraph could be replaced by something more original. > what is good for their body. '...their bodies', actually :) For those cases, if unsure, use adjectives, for example: 'what is good on a corporal level'. > why should the food manufacturers be forced to lower the fat, sugar and salt? You're recycling too much IMO. > The government does not need to make the decision... Unless somebody said the government 'needs' to make that decision, there's no reason for you to state that (i.e. you don't need it, funnily enough). I think something like 'isn't supposed to make the decision' or 'can't afford making the decision' is better. > For example, people would eat more than a sausage if the salt and fat content has reduced because they are not satisfied with these tasteless sausages. While there are no grammatical errors, the way you phrase this part is a bit rookie. Suggested revision: 'For example, a low-fat low-salt sausage would hardly satisfy consumers, so they'd try to compensate by increasing their intake.' > Thus, forcing food manufacturers to lower the fat, sugar and salt content in food may induce people to eat more. You're spinning 'round too much IMO. > young or old alike. Suggested revision: 'young and old alike'. Reasons: it avoids a gratuitous alliteration ('or old') and emphasises the warning nature of the essay. > children being overweight result from taking excessive junk food. This one's not correct. Suggested revisions: '... overweight, a result from...' or '...overweight resulting from...' > Therefore, forcing manufacturers to lower the fat, sugar and salt content in food is necessary. Again, you're repeating yourself too much. > When you eat a poor diet with all kinds of junk food You don't eat a diet, you either 'eat all kinds of junk food' or 'have a poor diet with all kinds of junk food'. > Furthermore, having unhealthy food causes premature deaths. There's nothing wrong in 'having' unhealthy food, unless you're 'eating' it as well ;) Of course, 'having unhealthy meals' does work very well here. 513 words all in all, which is a bit too much for IELTS (you're good to go with half of it), but both grammar and fluency are sound. I'd give you a 7 band or maybe a 7.5.
Ewain Originally Answered: Is this essay good? Plz give me some comments,some improvements and the IELTS band score for this essay?
First: I'd pick a better title. A hook for the reader. How about: Food or Junk Food? or "Healthy Eating Habits Is Not Enough" or The Sweet Enemy: Junk Food. Then, I suppose you have followed a writing procedure: For each paragraph you define: Paragraph Function: Description or narration. Brainstorming Focusing Topic sentences Supporting sentences Closing sentence In the second paragraph you write an opposite point of view of what you want to deliver in your essay. You implied that people would eat more:"Thus, forcing food manufacturers to lower the fat, sugar and salt content in food may induce people to eat more." ; and this is like counterattacking yourself. Hope this can be of help to you.

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