Read this and tell if you would read it or not?
Topic: The steps of writing a book review
July 23, 2019 / By Jedidiah Question:
ok now...this is a part of my friends book. I read it and thought it was amazingly good! I wanna see how other people like it. *ps if anyone thinks its about vampires.. yah it has none in it... its about a girl who recieves these really cool powers. she feels so alone in the world and doesnt know how to use them. she messes things up sometimes because she doesnt know how to control them. A week later after she recieves them, a new boy comes along and she meets him. he has the same powers as her and he helps her get control of them. way down along the line, theres a "so called bad guy" who comes and everytime the girl is near him, she looses her powers. when he finally kidnapps her, she cant do anything to save herself. Theres alot more to it then that but heres a segment from it:
I’ve never believe in witches, vampires, magical powers, and all of the rest. I just knew it was physically impossible for someone to cast a spell, move stuff with there mind, or people drinking blood and lying in coffins. Even when I was a kid I knew none of them were real. Well…at least I thought they were until it happened.
I started to hear breathing, heavy breathing. It wasn’t only mine. It was off key with mine.
I ran as fast as I could. As I though I would, I fell. Im so klutzy and whatever was after me would probably get me, and kill me. I heard its footsteps coming closer and closer. I tried to scream for help but it was no use. I closed my eyes as I heard the persons breathing right next to me. “Hello” The deep voice said. I spoke very low, “hi.” I looked up at the man. He was tall, thin, and had many scars. I gulped so loud he probably heard it. His eyes were deep purple and they had a red tint. My heart was beating so fast I was sure I would have a heat attack. I wasn’t to far from cliff. It was still very clear in site. I slowly got up from the forest floor. The man grabbed my wrist and pulled me up faster. I was shocked. I brushed the dirt off of me as I carefully watched his movements. He was in front of me now, my back facing the lake.
He was coming closer to me and I was walking backwards taking large steps. He grabbed my wrists. I screamed. “Let me go now! Get your hands off of me.” I yelled. He pulled me to the cliff. We were at the edge of the cliff. He let go. My wrists were swollen and red. My toes were hanging off the edge. He put his hand out and the water started to bubble and make huge waves. My jaw dropped and my eyes were wide. My whole body tensed and he laughed at my shock. He spun me around, now I was facing him. I was guessing he wanted to see my expression. “Good luck Bri.” He said in an evil tone and I was shocked he knew my name. I didn’t have anything on that said my name. No necklace, bracelet absolutely nothing. He started chanting words that I couldn’t understand; he was saying them too fast. After a few sentences he grabbed me tight and pushed me off the cliff.
I screamed at the top of my lungs and in seconds I went into the wavy mysterious river with a huge splash. The river was much deeper than it looked from above. I was 11 feet under; dark water surrounded me. The only trace of light was at the surface. I barely could see the man who pushed me off. I tried with all the energy I had left to swim to the top. I couldn’t. The waves and everything was pulling me under. The only choice was to drown.
haha thanks my friends really happy about the comments [= i read the whole thing. seriously i helped her write it and its not about vampires. It said the word once saying that the girl (bri) doesnt belive in them. Its so original once you get into it. its based on dreams shes had before. i promise you its NOTHING like twilight [= ill put up more later shes still editing some parts
yess! she really wrote it! and she says shes really sorry for all the spelling mistakes. she was just jotting this stuff down. NOO This is only 5 PARAGRAPHS of the book. not the whole book! haha. yes... I will put up the better version later.....thanks for all the great comments. my friend is really proud [=
This is from my friend who wrote it [=
- yay! thanks everyone! im glad u liked it sooooo much lolz ill posttt the first few chapterz up latterzz [= cnt wait!
Best Answers: Read this and tell if you would read it or not?
Gareth | 10 days ago
ahmayzing!!!!!!!!!!!!! wen this book gets publishd pleeease tell meeeee!!!!!!!!!! OHMYGOD where is the rest!!!!!!!!?????????!!!!!!! LOL
im sure [email protected]
in reviews it'll get lots of if u luv twilight ull luv this SOOO [email protected]
really good, its gt potential 2 b a bst seller LOL
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Originally Answered: Is it more difficult learning to read Chinese, or Japanese? Which language is the hardest to read?
Manadrin Chinese uses simplified Chinese, which is different than what Japan uses.
Cantonese Chinese uses the same kind of kanji that Japan does. There are some differences, but it's mostly the same.
Also, Chinese letters have the same reading every time, unlike how Kanji are read in Japanese.
They're both pretty difficult and I'm not sure which is easier. Arabic or Thai are pretty hard languages to learn to read from what I hear.
I counted 4 or maybe 5 paragraphs. Not enough for a book. Pretty good writing for a high school kid. but the end "The only choice was to drown?" Sorry, but that is not a very good ending. Or did I miss something and that is not all of the book?
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It's a good story line, it's interesting with a lot of potencial, the only improvment I can think of is the language seems a little... newbie you know? but nothing an editor can't fix :P
Well done to your friend from me ; )
Also, it does seem a LOT like twilight - twilight inspired...
Even though people think it's rubbish, I just wanna say twilight obsessed fans like me love it :P
And there are a LOT of them : )
It'll sell well...
👍 31 | 👎 6
I didn't read the whole thing...
BUT I kind of think its about vampires... Yeah already getting that vampire vibe...
There are already vampire books, any OTHER book about vampires with a writing style that is not above the 4th grade level will be deemed fan fiction for the twilight novels... The disgraces that they are..
PEOPLE USED TO READ REAL BOOKS!!! REAL BOOKS!! AND NOW THIS!!!!
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Read this and tell if you would read it or not? Hmmmmm?
I suppose if I had read it then by definition I would but since I didn't read it I have proved that I wouldn't so therefore not. I think....
OK my head hurts now I'm going to lie down.
👍 13 | 👎 2
I like it! Your friend has potential to be a good writer. Tell her to try not to use " I " so much because it starts to sound a bit repetative.
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You know, I have a very hard time reading something written by someone who doesn't know the difference between THERE, THEIR AND THEY'RE.
Not to mention (but I will, anyway): YOUR and YOU'RE, ITS and IT'S, among others.
👍 -5 | 👎 -2
OMG its soo totally interesting! i would really want to read the finished book! keep up the good work =D
👍 -14 | 👎 -4
No. It reads very immaturely. "I'm so klutzy and whatever was after me would probably get me, and kill me."
It's too... Jump right into it with no background.
👍 -23 | 👎 -6
Originally Answered: Stuck in this negative spiral (long read but please read, i'm greatly in need of help)?
dude i totally feel u.... i dropped out of hs as a sophomore because i ****** up that yr because we moved cities nd i hung out with the fag nd nerdy group, so i had no reason to even wake up in the mourning... i did online **** for 1 yr nd it was a waste of time... ever since i moved out to where i live its been quite depressing, however i made it through 1st semester by thinking i could go back to other city if i take bus in the mourning or something.... however i obviously didnt do that, so i just dropped out.... then i got me ged jr yr to work a shitty *** job... but i always lived on knowing that i can nd will b a great person that will make a difference... ppl always have better things then u because if u didnt start out on top, u probably wont b.... anyways, my life currently sucks... i havent asked anyone to a date in yrs because i feel so bad about myself, i never hang out with ppl that respect me, im going to most likely b a complete failure nd waste of talent.... however that doesnt stop me from trying to improve my life because ive wailed in self pity for 2.5 yrs nd that hasnt gotten me anywhere..... to boost up self confidence i would advise volunteer work, then doing what u do best nd own it... then get a job, doesnt matter what as long as u have constant communication with ppl especially the opposite sex....then enroll in a community college for ur aa or whatever, or just take a class to communicate with ppl..... i put myself in this mess, so i have to dig myself out... the same goes for u man...