Passive writing vs. active writing?

Passive writing vs. active writing? Topic: How to write a cause of action
July 24, 2019 / By Celinda
Question: Someone told me that my writing was too passive. I have a general idea between the two, but I need a more concrete explanation and example. Are there certain words that signify passive words and certain words that signify active words? *sorry, I meant 'passive writing' and 'action writing' instead of 'words'
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Annmarie Annmarie | 7 days ago
Consider that this person may not have known what they were talking about. Many people say "your writing is too passive" without actually knowing what the term means. Many people seem to think that any sentence with the words "was" or "were" is passive. Active and passive are grammatical terms that have little to do with how exciting or engaging a piece of writing is. The basic form of a sentence in the active voice is "The X verbed the Y." The same sentence converted into passive voice looks like "The Y was verbed by the X" or "The Y was verbed." For example: Active voice - "The crocodile ate the man." Passive voice - "The man was eaten by the crocodile" or "The man was eaten." Active voice emphasises who or what did the action. Passive voice emphasises who or what the action happened to. It's also useful if you don't know, or don't want to say, who or what did the action. The classic example is the initial reports of a crime - "A man was stabbed to death in Frith Street last night." Not many people, even those who say to avoid passives, would insist on changing that to "An unknown person or persons stabbed a man to death in Frith Street last night." The words "was" and "were" don't automatically make a sentence passive. For instance, "The apple was red." Is that passive? What action is happening in the sentence? Is some external force acting on the apple to make it red? (OK, its DNA codes for proteins that cause it to appear red to a human eye, but that influence was in the past. Is anything causing the apple to be red right now?) However, that sort of sentence can be a sign of weak writing in fiction. Why are you telling the reader about this red apple? Why mention it at this point in the story? Why tell the reader that it's red? Show us the world as your character experiences it. Show us the character interacting with the world. Show us what the character perceives as important. "Joe's stomach growled as he neared the market stall. He had just enough money for one apple, and he picked a red one - the colour his mum always put in his lunchbox when he was a boy." (Not especially inspired or inspiring, but you see what I'm getting at, I hope. And look - it still has a "was" in there!)
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Annmarie Originally Answered: What are active and passive verbs?
An active verb "does something," expresses "action," "performs." An active verb has an object on which it performs its action. "The dog ate my homework." "Ate" is an active verb ("dog" is the subject; "homework" is the object). "My homework was eaten by the dog." "Was eaten" is a passive verb ("homework" is the subject; there is no object; "by the dog" is a prepositional phrase acting as an adverb and modifying "was eaten"). An excellent web site for understanding active and passive verbs is at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/g... . "Active voice" uses active verbs; "passive voice" uses passive verbs. Scientific papers and law-enforcement reports often use passive voice because it avoids stating that a particular person did a particular act, while stating that the act was done and had a particular effect. In a surgical report, for example, the surgeon may dictate "The site was prepped and draped in the usual sterile fashion and a small incision was made." In that case, what is important clearly is the method of preparation, not who did it. The alternative active voice dictation would be "The nurse on duty, Mary Ann Roediger, prepped the site by swabbing it with alcohol sponges and swabbing it with Betadine, after which it was draped with sterile white drapes, leaving the surgery site uncovered. I then made a small incision." Note how much more has to be said, most of which is irrelevant--"standard" means that the exact same procedure is nearly always used, and when a different procedure is used, it will be described more fully. In a police report, you may find "A loud argument was heard, followed by a loud noise that could have been gunfire, according to the neighbor. An automobile was seen leaving the driveway minutes later." Again, the important parts are what was heard and seen, not who heard or saw it. Contrast the passive voice report with the active voice: "The neighbor, Carl Spencer, reported that he heard a loud argument followed by a noise that could, according to him, have been gunfire. Spencer also reported that he saw an automobile leave the driveway at the subject address moments after the noise." Note that the spotlight is no longer on the argument, the noise, and the speeding car, it's on Carl Spencer. Active voice spotlights the actor. It is appropriate for nearly all non-scientific writing because it keeps the action clear and easy to understand. Read more about active voice and how to use it here: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resour...
Annmarie Originally Answered: What are active and passive verbs?
You have two actives there. In sentences written in passive voice, the subject receives the action expressed in the verb; the subject is acted upon. The agent performing the action may appear in a "by the . . ." phrase or may be omitted. In sentences written in active voice, the subject performs the action expressed in the verb; the subject acts. To make that passive I suggest saying: The war was fought to extend influence would change to an infinitive passive: "Their influence is extended by the war they fight"

Yarwood Yarwood
"was" is passive. Active Voice: The twister left a path of destruction. Passive Voice: A path of destruction was left by the twister. Writers should usually use the active voice rather than the passive. It’s considered to be a more powerful and straightforward form of expression. The active voice also uses less words to convey the same message. Passive - James was chosen by Kathy to be her assistant. Active - James chose Kathy to be her assistant. Edit: It's not just "was" though, but I find I write that more than anything. Passive - Many inventions were created by Edison. Active - Edison created many inventions
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Shelomi Shelomi
No, those are examples of alterations in verb stressful: present vs. previous. this is energetic writing: A lion ate him. this is passive writing: He exchange into eaten via a lion. interior the 1st occasion, the subject of the sentence (lion) is doing the action (ingesting). interior the 2nd, the subject of the sentence (he) has the action achieved to him. you could generally % out passive stressful in the process the "exchange into...via" shape.
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Shelomi Originally Answered: Solute and passive and active transport?
Since there is a higher concentration of glucose inside relative to outside of the cell it would diffuse passively towards the outside (towards lower concentration) but then again as a matter of fact non polar cell membranes are not permeable to small but polar molecules like sucrose. So B is wrong. D is right because a transporter molecule can get sucrose through the non polar membrane and even against its concentration gradient when there is energy available as is the case in active transport.

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